One sunny day a kid decided to ride his brand new yellow bike. So he hopped on his bike and he decided where he was going to go and he decided to go to the river because it was such a hot day and it was a great day for a swim. But, the river is an hour away. On the way to the river he was biking down the road and he saw these weird people so he dropped his new bike and ran. The people taped his new bike to the pole so he couldn’t use it again.
Hello Angus!
This week’s 100 WC prompt was a unique one–and you rose to the challenge 🙂 Your writing was fun to read!
Keep writing!
Francine (Team 100)
Twin Cities, Minnesota USA
Hi Angus. It is definitely not fair that your character has had his precious bike taken from him.
Instead of using ‘decided’ twice, what’s a synonym you might use? Perhaps you could change your river sentence ….. As it was such a hot day and great for a swim, he thought he would go to the river.
What do you think?
Try reading your work aloud before you post and you’ll find that it helps you feel how the sentences sound.
Thanks for sharing,
Jackie (Team 100WC)
New Plymouth NZ