One day I got in my car and the rubber on my tyres were so frozen because we’d had a -13 frost. When I started driving to work I saw this striped zebra that was starving for food. So I stopped and I went to go get some hay from the shed beside the striped zebras paddock. When I went in his paddock I gave the zebra his hay and he was so excited I had food for him.Then I walked over to his water. His water was frozen so I broke the ice for him in his trough
Well, the zebra was very lucky that you came along on that day. I like how you showed so much confidence and didn’t show any annoyance; you just described someone getting on with the job because it had to be done. I also like how you described how cold it was, so you really set the scene for the reader. Well done.
Hello Angus,
I noticed you have used all four prompt words in your interesting story and you managed it in exactly 100 words. It can be hard to do so sometimes. Well done.
Ross Mannell (Team 100)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
Thanks everyone